Creative Paragraphs- Man In Space

This week we have been learning to rework our writing to make our paragraphs interesting for our audience. We started by writing a creative sentence about this picture. As a class we will choose Nate's sentence because we liked it the best and wrote a paragraph each to follow the chosen sentence. Here is the beginning of my story that starts with Nate's sentence.

A spaceman bravely walks out into the icy milky way from the earth. He gets ready to go to space in his rocket ship by putting his suit on. 5, 4, 3, 2, 1 and he’s off on an alien finding mission  5 weeks later in the portal universe  the zomie will came after you so run

  

1 year, 4 months and 200 days later in the Green milky way he is trying to get the city back. He didn’t know that in this universe every monster had a machine gun, sniper gun and a tommy gun each.  Luckily the spaceman had a tommy gun. It helped him to get the galexy back. He was only able to do it because he never gave up!